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I know Nayuki has a crush on Yuichi. And i jus thought what she'd do if she saw him kissing Ayu.

Tools: Copic & Prismacolor markers, and Faber Castell Pens

How bout some Feedback on this, this is my first actual scene i made. As you can see, my pieces were always characters with a crappy background

holy crap, i jus realized that the stripes on Ayu's pj's aren't showing. i guess the scanner didn't pick it up


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:iconmythchan:
Hi there! :] Overall i think the image captured what you were going for-- an emotional response to the situation. The sadness on the focus character is very apparent. The image looks good, especially the background which is something that a lot of artists struggle with, so good job!

Three major tenets of character acting are the face, teh hands, and the feet. Because the faces on most of the characters are obstructed, we're left to retrieve the acting from visual cues in what you've left us with: the hands. The character inside the room in the yellow jumper has her hands balled into fists. She looks like she's going to punch that dude in the throat with all that tension. To alleviate this, I'd suggest giving her hands a more relaxed position. Maybe touching his elbow or, at the very least, laying open on her knees instead.

On your main character, I'd like to see the other hand doing something. Yes, she is sad, but what is the underlying emotion? If she loves one of these two people she could be hurt, angry, any sort of thing along those lines to give depth to that emotion. I feel because you were able to get the sadness in her, you are capable of deepening that emotion to make it more evocative. Having her hand splayed against the wall, for example, would give the impression of stress. Having her arm crossed in front of her would give the impression that she is comforting herself, denoting that she feels hurt. Visual cues such as these connect the scene in the room with the girl outside of it. Outside of this, I think her shoulders are uneven, our left (her right) one being higher than the other. Because her elbows are on the same general plane, it gives the impression that her shoulders would be pulled up to about the same area. The extra push up of the left (her right) shoulder just seems to obscure that she has a neck since it's up too far. :]

Very nice piece of work! I think it was very successful! Keep it up!
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:iconlissyfishy:
Even though I have no idea what anime this is from, I have been intrigued to find out! I love where the blue haired girl is positioned in the picture, just the right spot for a balanced picture! I also loved the use of different types of lighting. You have a lot of talent using markers (those are what you used, right?)

I can really feel the girl's sadness. The pain is so palpable, it makes me hurt for her.

The only thing I think I can possible suggest for next time is to work on face shape. The blue haired girl's face just seems... I don't know... a little off. I suppose it just needs to be a little longer. I realize you were trying to have the face tilt down a bit, therefore making it distorted. Believe me, I have the worst time trying to create that distortion properly. I'm really not the one to judge this sort of thing :XD:

Great work!
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:iconangel-wolfmaiden:
Awesome job on the shading of this~

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:iconsampsonbui:
lol nice picture, although i never liked seeing a girl cry
:iconclampfan101:
poor girl... :(
it's beautiful ^^

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:iconlon3lyaznikka:
yea, poor Nayuki, but i've been reading doujins where she's always peakin through the doors crack and always finding yuichi screwin somebody but her, and that makes her jealous
:iconlon3lyaznikka:
yea, i hate seeing girls cry too, it jus makes you wanna give them a hug or something
:iconlon3lyaznikka:
thx, i used up all of my gray to neutralize the bright colors TT_TT
:iconangel-wolfmaiden:
You're welcome~ Wow need nore grey :XD:

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:iconmihonosaka:
Poor Nayuki, this whole crush on Yuichi thing especially happens in the 2002 anime.......:hug:s the 2002!Nayuki and this Nayuki

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yea, i wanna hug her too to comport her, too bad she's jus an anime character
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yup yup, and i need to get different gradations of them too. i only got a few

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